I stand the wonderful lyrics (barely discernible) and vocals compressed (and echoed/delayed?) to the mid-range, but the instrumentals sound just as compressed and that's a bit of a killjoy. Fuck, high or not, it's quite pleasant, I hope you can develop this into a full song (or adjust the drums for a better outtro, kinda stark the way it is), I think it'd do quite well!
Is that you singing? Damn, not bad homie, just wish I could hear it more clearly, gay or not! So many rock and metal giants have done melodies like this... hope this review helps.